Lauren's blog

Lauren comments on the proposed bill that would allow handguns on college campuses. Her position is not firmly stated but she does lean for the passing of the bill. Her tone is not aggressive which suggests that she is analyzing and providing information but is not 100% all for it. I believe Lauren’s audience is general because she does explain and give information about the issue in a very clear diction.

Lauren provides information and reasons for the positions taken both for and against the bill but does not seem to give her own position on the bill; as she ends her commentary with “You decide,” prompting the reader to do just that, take a position in a very controversial issue indeed.

Lauren needed to go into more depth about the possible positive affects the bill would have on campuses if passed. The paragraphs are not organized; I think she should have broken up the paragraphs a little more for easy flow.

Lauren’s use of a question as the title and also in her conclusion is successful in catching the reader’s attention and getting the reader actively involved in her reasoning.

I like the way Lauren explained both the negative and positive affects this bill would have in college campuses if passed. Why people want to pass the bill and why some do not want the bill to be passed. I think this is very important to the reader so that one can better decide a position on the issue.

When Lauren presents references such as links to statistics, she does not provide details and a thorough introduction to her link. I feel she did not take the necessary time to bring new arguments to the discussion other then the basic pros and cons. This made her commentary less interesting.

Overall I think she does backup both arguments very well and her embedded links as references provide the reader with very important information that helps understand the broadness of the issue being discussed.

I don’t support this bill at all because I think we should and cannot live in fear, the number of tragedies in college and universities has been very tragic but there just has to be another solution to the problem then to let any licensed individual carry a gun around on campus, just because you are licensed does not mean you don’t have issues.